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I'm just doing it

So I'm sitting here trying to cram in enough work to at least get a solid first draft of this month's quality 3-page, and I finally had enough. That's not quality. It wouldn't be close to quality. 
Quality stuff was never really supposed to be too far beyond first draft, but it was supposed to be a *good* first draft, you know? Like, not one that you've pumped out, one that you've taken your time with, chewed it over, thought about for a while. So that's what I'm doing.
From now on, while I'll still be working on various Quality stuff (with a probable exception for loglines, after I get everything back to multiples of 5), I won't have any deadlines for any of it. It'll be done when it's done.

3-Page Treatment 23 - Streets of Gold

Whoops! Forgot to put this up on Saturday! Oh well, it's going up now.

This one, I don't feel like is living up to its full potential. After finishing it, I came to the conclusion that, rather than the 90-page screenplay I designed, this should totally have been the 120-page epic the logline implied. That would've been a lot more work, though, even for a 3-page treatment, so it ended up being this.

Which brings me to something that's sort of off-topic, but also relevant: I'm considering cutting Quality stuff. Mostly because, it's really not quality; it's just more quantity, and it's leading to all my other quantity stuff suffering. I think a real Quality counterpart to my system would have no time limits; it's just done when it's done. So rather than cutting it all, I may just, cut the deadlines? We'll see what happens. Just know I'm thinking about it.

Anyway, the original logline for this treatment:
The story of a Spanish conquistador wh…

Weekly Theme: Treasure Hunters

This week's theme is treasure hunters. There are a lot of great movies about treasure hunters and temple raiders, people trying to find pirate gold or legendary emeralds. This week's loglines will all be about people like Indiana Jones, Jack Sparrow, or Joan Wilder.

Logline 130 - That Girl with Amnesia

When a young woman with amnesia wanders into a small town in Utah, everybody does what they can to figure out who she is and where she came from. But as time passes and she finds a place for herself in the town, they stop helping her remember, and start hoping she doesn't.

Weekly Theme: All Alone

This week's loglines all have to do with being alone, whether it's a high school outcast struggling for acceptance, a castaway on a deserted island, or a lone conspiracy theorist who's the only one who sees what's really happening.

3-Page Treatment 22 - Queen of Air and Darkness

This week's treatment was rough. I think it was the intrigue of it. I had to figure out three different characters' plots and plans and how they interacted with each other. I'm sure I could've done it better, but I think it came out okay for only a week's worth of time.

But yeah no, this treatment in particular could've benefited from more time. But them's the breaks, and like I said, it came out okay. I'm not ashamed of it or anything, and it definitely came out a lot better than it would've twenty-two weeks ago!

The original logline:A young human woman, kidnapped as an infant and raised by fairies, maneuvers in the fairy courts in a bid to take the throne of a fairy queen.

Logline 121 - The Envoy

When the new queen finds out that her predecessor humiliated and executed Genghis Khan's envoy who had come seeking peaceful trade, she personally makes the perilous journey to his court to petition him for mercy.

Weekly Theme: Distant Lands

This week's loglines will all have to do with distant lands and foreign nations, whether that just means the protagonist is somewhere far from home, or if it's about an attack from a previously unknown enemy from over the mountains.

3-Page Treatment 21 - The Rat King

This treatment is my best yet, I think. Like, maybe "best" is a little strong, but it's a strong story that's been written well. Compared to my other stuff, that is.

I consider this the real firstfruits of my new method. See for yourself, tell me what you think.

The logline:
When the members of the Virtue Squad, a superhero team, are all killed by a new supervillain, their sidekicks and powerless allies are the only ones left to stop the villain.

Logline 118 - King of the Sea

When a viking king abandons his throne to become a pirate, his son and daughter both follow suit. But when his children conspire against him and seize control of the coastline, he's forced to ally with his former kingdom to stop them.

Ranking 3 Page Treatments 18-21

So we just realized that Teddy's schedule got a little wonky due to our vacation. Whoops! So this last Saturday was supposed to be the day I ranked the Treatments again, but I knew there weren't 5 new ones yet (because he didn't do one our vacation week) so I didn't rank them. He's still figuring out how to adjust his schedules. For now, I will rank!

Treatment 18
Treatment 19
Treatment 20
Treatment 21/Quality 2

The Mantle of Power This one just didn't stand out. I think the characters were just too weak for me. I didn't get most of their motivations or relationships.
The White Wind I helped with this one! So, maybe I'm biased, but I really like it. I like the twist that the bad guy was supposed to have been the best friend. I like her becoming more spirit like through the whole treatment. I like it.
That Time of the Month The title is so punny. Oh so punny.
I really liked this one. You do definitely hear more "Teddy" in it. The only downside is, i…

10-Page Treatment 4 - Mars or Bust

Oh man! Number four. On Monday I start my first screenplay. Well, I mean, fourth screenplay, but first screenplay from this writing plan! Exciting!

As for this treatment, it's short, but I think that's because it doesn't need to be longer, and not because I'm, like, lazy. I really like how it turned out, but if I choose it to turn into a screenplay,* I'm going to want to brush up on NASA and space and that sort of thing. It's definitely a kids' movie, so I don't have to be Hard Sci-Fi accurate, but I'd like to make something that people who know NASA would enjoy, rather than roll their eyes at.

On that note, I'm worried the Sally and Petunia subplot is a little off. Having never been to public school, all of my knowledge is based off of hearsay and movies, so I suspect that part of the world will end up a little cliche if I'm not careful.

All in all, though, like I said, I like it.

The original logline:
When a 12-year-old girl invents a propu…

Quality 3-Page Treatment 2 - In the Line of Fire

I'm not very good at bowling. I never have been. When I was younger, I didn't even know how to throw the ball. I'd use two hands and rock it between my legs, like throwing a basketball granny style. I got good enough with it that I could pretty consistently score in the 90s.

Then, when I learned the proper way to throw a bowling ball, my scores dropped even lower, because I was so unfamiliar with how to do it. It felt like I was going backwards, but once I got used to it, I was able to consistently score over 100. Not a huge jump, but a jump nonetheless.
(Full disclosure, I haven't been bowling in years now, and would probably be lucky to get a 70). 
With this treatment - and the Quantity one, but especially with this one - I feel like I'm learning how to do things properly, and it's hurting my game for the moment. I switched up my normal style two, two and a half times while writing this treatment, and it definitely suffered for it. 
But at the same time, ther…

3-Page Treatment 20 - That Time of the Month

This treatment is the first one I wrote entirely trying a new method of outlining, and I think it's clear that I'm still figuring things out. That said - and while maybe this sounds a little arrogant? - I really love how much of my voice was able to come through in the treatment. Which is to say, any.

I'm not normally one to say extensive outline strangles creativity, but in my case, it definitely has hampered my voice. By "voice," here, I mean a writer's unique way of phrasing and explaining things. I'm not experienced enough to have a strong voice, but I feel like everything I wrote before came off as vaguely clinical, whereas this definitely is more "Teddy."

So hopefully in the future I'll be able to develop that more, while still getting the structural quality of my earlier treatments.

The original logline:
An adopted Canadian girl discovers she's a werewolf, and goes on a quest among the supernatural community to find out about her h…


Yeah, so, the mob doesn't count as having superpowers in today's logline. But I'm allowing it, on the basis of it still fitting the feeling of "Weak person against overwhelming odds."

So there.