Ranking 3-Page Treatments 5-8

Whoops, getting this up a little late.

Before I get into this, I should talk about/decide how I'm going to go about ranking things in the future, given that I'll be making a corkboard every two weeks, a 20-page treatment every three, and a step outline every four.

I think I'm just not going to rank corkboards, so that's easy. But then for the 20-page treatments, I think I'll rank those... every so often? I don't really know. Maybe I just won't. Maybe I'll rank them whenever I need to decide which of two I'll be writing.

Also, I really need to pick another word than "rank." Because there's no ranking happening, never has been. It's never really even been the intention. Oh well.

Now, on to this month's treatments!

As I expected, I liked these four treatments way better than the last four. Enough that this time it's actually difficult to pick which one I'm going to make a corkboard for. Which is a good thing! It's great!

For reference, here are links to the treatments, and working titles for the first two:

Treatment 5 - I'm calling it Edge of the Universe.
Treatment 6 - This one is End War.
Deus Ex Machina (Treatment 7)
Out of Date (Treatment 8)

Edge of the Universe

I'll tell you right off the bat, this one is one of my favorites. It's very dramatic, it's one of the more unusual ideas, and I had a lot of fun writing it - which shows, I think, in the length. It's one of the longer 3-page treatments I've written (it's actually 3 pages!).

I'm a little worried that it's kind of light on antagonists for the first, like, act and a half; but I think the struggle to survive is enough. And obviously, if/when I actually write it, I can just emphasize the turncoats as being unruly from the beginning.

I also like how much the good guys lose. I'm definitely one to take it too easy on my protagonists, but this treatment doesn't do that. Even the end is a loss - though not a final loss. I like that.

I'm just gonna say it: probably making this one into a corkboard.

End War

I like End War, but I'm worried it's a little... silly. That could work for it in the right context - I could see it making a fine anime, for example. But without the right context, I think the whole psychic superweapon might just turn into generic action schlock. Which isn't a bad thing, but it's clearly not how it was written.

Plus, then there's the fact that I did kinda take it easy on my protagonist. I certainly could've made things much harder on her.

Setting those concerns aside, I do like it. It's a relatively unique idea, with a really fun setting, and plenty of setup for drama. It's an idea I'll keep in mind in the future, I think, but I won't be proceeding with this specific treatment.

Deus Ex Machina

This one is not too dissimilar from End War. I love the idea. I love everything about the idea. But this execution just doesn't seem to live up to the idea.

I think it feels small, and a little schizophrenic - which, I think, comes from it being a little small. There's a lot of potential crammed into too little story, and I think it just doesn't fit. 

I don't know if I could do this one small-scale. I think I'd need to take at least a couple weeks to write a proper 3-page treatment for this story. Maybe it should be a 5-page treatment.

I'll probably revisit it in the future, do something like that. But I just don't like the plot here. Yes! That's the problem. I love the idea, even the story, I just don't like the plot. I think because I don't like the antagonist, but... ech. I don't know.

Out of Date

Rather predictably. I think Out of Date is a great first go at writing a romcom treatment. I think it focuses too much on just the Bish/Liam relationship, I think it lacks substance, and I think it lacks drama, but all of these things are expected from a first try. Maybe the next one will be better.


So there you go. Looks like it's not even that much of a contest. Edge of the Universe wins! I'm looking forward to continuing to work with it.